I've done it again...

dreamer • 26 December 2011 at 8:40 PM

Have you guys seen my other topic where I posted the lyrics to one of my songs?

Well I just wrote my third song, and I was wondering if I could share it with you guys and get constructive critisism?

Post if you're intrested. 😸

unebra • 26 December 2011 at 8:41 PM

id lovde to hear it @dreamer

pizza5pizza5 • 26 December 2011 at 8:50 PM

Cmon dani, post your song!

dreamer • 26 December 2011 at 9:27 PM

@Unebra
@Pizza5pizza5

Lemme post the first part:

I was lying on my bed
With thoughts and feelings in my head
Regrets, hopes, wishes, dreams
I'm a bit depressed it seems.
Feeling angry and alone,
I just picked up my phone,
12 Am, it's late again,
But I still gotta do this...
I put my thoughts in this song,
Tried not to make it too long,
But the pages in my mind are filled with words.
Surrounded by my fears,
I've never felt this in all my years,
But it's my longing for this special guy... Yeah.

Then I ran to the store this morning,
The love in my mind now mourning
For I was stuck in a trap,
I can't get out of, that's a wrap.


But it's love,
It don't have to fit in a glove,
A blessing from above,
Or a curse,
Let's just hope it won't get worse.
So I hope you understand,
It just grabs me by the hand
And pulls me down, down, down...
In love.

Someone post so I can continue the song. ^^

leopardclaws • 26 December 2011 at 9:33 PM

nice song so far!

*post*

dreamer • 26 December 2011 at 9:34 PM

Continued:

It's the bright lamp on my bedside,
That big book on my shelf.
Now my eyes are open wide,
And I still hate myself.
I am weak, sick,
This pain, is thick,
And I let it burn me, bring me down,
Becuase it makes that little sound that
Quickly starts a rythm,
Captures it in words.
Scattered on the pathway,
Now this one's for the birds.

If I could scold my own mind,
Then trust me, I'd be dead.
But instead I just sit here
Having conflicts in my head.
When will this sun shine?
When will I cross the line?
Where love meets hate
And I find the fate
That brings my heart to ease

But it's love,
It don't have to fit in a glove,
A blessing from above,
Or a curse,
Let's just hope it won't get worse.
So I hope you understand,
It just grabs me by the hand
And pulls me down, down, down...
In love.

I'm so sick of all this waiting,
But I just can't stop debating,
My mind is flooding,
My heart is cutting
Me to my own pieces,
Now I just can't pretend
That I'm close to the end
'Cuz I'll be here,
For a while, while, while...

But it's love,
It don't have to fit in a glove,
A blessing from above,
Or a curse,
Let's just hope it won't get worse.
So I hope you understand,
It just grabs me by the hand
And pulls me down, down, down...
In love.




That's the rest. xD Whaddya guys think?