Writing Help

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 7:44 PM

I'm writing a short story, and it's due tomorrow. I just need a few vivd descriptions on the following things:

-a forest
-a river
-a sad harp song

Thanks {:

*Please post your example xD

meixiaotian • 30 January 2012 at 7:52 PM

Vivid description? I'll try.

Forest:
There was a beautiful forest up ahead. The ground was blanketed with twigs and grass. The trees were strong, and has bright green leaves, full of life. Birds happily flitted through the trees, singing or gathering food.
River:
There was a rushing river. The water whooshed by quickly, and disappeared around the next bend. The water was clear, and and reflected the sun brightly. The sound was a comforting sound.
Sad Harp Song:
The song was slow, and sad, as if the Whats-it-called was strumming slowly, without all of the spirit. The notes echoed quietly before drifting off.

stellalunagirl • 30 January 2012 at 7:52 PM

So you just want us to describe them for you? Are you gonna be able to fit it into your story?

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 7:55 PM

@stellalunagirl
Yeah. ^^
I need to be better xD

icymuffin • 30 January 2012 at 7:57 PM

Mm~
Describe it by smell, sight, sounds, touch, maybe "taste", and the feeling it leaves inside of you...?

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 7:57 PM

@icymuffin
That's what I need help on.
I'm not good at these things you see ><''

stellalunagirl • 30 January 2012 at 7:58 PM

@whitefall
Okey dokey Chacha, i'll PM you with the descriptions. (:

qwaszx • 30 January 2012 at 8:00 PM

@whitefall

Forest:
The forest was a fresh green, colorful against the gray sky. There were birds flitting about in the trees, chirping happily and making a lot of noise. Small animals rustled the leaves on the ground, uncovering small white flowers. A yound deer looked up startled and bounded off, it's white tail bouncing.
River:
A clear river flowed, rippling softly with fish swimming along in its currents. It ran swiftly, bubbling in some places, swirling in others. It reflected the sun in its blue waters, shimmering as it gracefully flowed down the small hill.
Song:
The music was pure and sorrowful. The player's fingers descended over the thin strings gracefully, reflecting their sadness. Each note was struck perfectly, tying together, never missing a beat.

Is that good enough?

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 8:02 PM

@qwaszx
I'll base off of it O_O

qwaszx • 30 January 2012 at 8:03 PM

@whitefall Haha, I could do better if you wanted. XD My IPod messed up in a couple of places. >.<

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 8:06 PM

@qwaszx
It's okay if you dont want to~

icymuffin • 30 January 2012 at 8:11 PM

I'm going to throw somethign out there 'cuz I don't want to do my own homework. xD

It was a densely forested area with towering pines and redwoods shading the mossy forest floor. Ferns sprouted in various colors and mushrooms protruded from underneath the fallen branches. The ground was littered with muddied leaves, fallen and now left to rot on the moist soil.
There was an occational swishing as a tree swayed to a breeze passing by far above the ground, but otherwise, the forest was deathly quiet.

blissy • 30 January 2012 at 8:36 PM

@whitefall

I'm sorry if my forest description pm sucks, I do not have too much knowledge on nature expertly. D:

Hope you can work with some of it though. ;^;

EDIT: Glad you think it's insane. XD

@whitefall

Not sure what I can do about the river, I haven't had too much experience with that kind of water. D: I might be able to make something about the harp...If you want me to try it. Probably won't be 3367 characters like last time though. I don't know the parts or letters to a harp either. D= I can't play music.

What class are you doing these things for anyway? XD

flowersoverboys • 30 January 2012 at 8:48 PM

LOL Again with this?

I should've done that BTW, instead of slaving over this /insane/ fairy tale. (I almost spelled it fairy tail again... *sweatdrop*)

Here's some ideas... because I really don't want to write these notes for science. 😋

Forest:
The sun broke through some of the foliage, making spotlights shine upon the forest floor. The branches swayed every so often, and the bird's song echoed all over. Squirrels climbed, and moles dug. Everything was in harmony and peace.

River:
It was clear. Blue. Never pausing for a moment. Water flowed, plenty for all creatures. The smallest of ripples would appear, and fish danced happily in the waves. The occasional deer appeared, drinking its pure waters. Life centered around here.

Harp:
It's melody haunted its listeners. The solemn tune rang out ominously. Memories of lost dreams and hopes appeared as the harp continued it's sad song. Each note echoed as it sang out all the sorrows of the world. Captivating all. Releasing none.

Gah. It's so LAME.... >_< I hope it helps~ I wanna read it tomorrow! *looked pointedly @whitefall* Lol

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 8:49 PM

@flowersoverboys
Okay xDD
It's already five pages and it's like 60% done. Watch it end up being like 10 pages lol

flowersoverboys • 30 January 2012 at 8:50 PM

@whitefall

She said it should only be 4 pages. GAHHH~~~ Mine's exceeding that. But not by much. Because I gave up on being descriptive. XD

whitefall • 30 January 2012 at 9:11 PM

@floweroverboys
I'm done the picture story.
It doesn'th ave to be four pages, right?
Jessica K. did like five