Could some peopel read this? :) I wrote my own version of another song.

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 5:04 PM

Has anyone heard "Perfect Two" by Auburn? I've heard the original version, and a slower, breakup version that someone else wrote.

Normal Version: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-lLvtydTM78&feature=related

Breakup Version: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZwWKkSiUNd0&feature=related

So I decided: Why not write a version before the relationship? There's one during and after, but I always think there's more tension before a real relationship is started.

So I wrote a new version of it, it sounds more like the breakup version with the slow music, and a few of the words in my version are the same, but that's the whole point. They're supposed to sound similar.

If someone wants to see my version, just post so I have more room in a new comment, I'll let you guys read it. 😊

#DaniThePell

anna914 • 17 February 2012 at 5:11 PM

sure i would like to see it



i dont that song tho @dreamer

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 5:16 PM

@Anna914 It's a nice song. I heard it in one of my friend's videos from real life on Youtube, then looked up the rest.

I'll post the first part, back and forth from here to my storage if need be, so could people try not to post until I get all the lyrics up? ;D

Ohhhh, yeahhhh...

I'm just waiting for you to tell me,
That I make the butterflies flutter in your belly.
If we were together, you would make me feel great,
I spend every night, dreaming 'bout a first date.
I don't think we'll ever have a purpouse,
But I love you and you only see the surface,
You could be mean to me but I wouldn't really care,
As long as I know that you're still standing there.
Don't think that I would act like me,
Without you, 'cuz you make me feel free.
And in time I'll make sure that you see,
We are meant to be...

'Cuz when I'm not with you I cry,
Sometimes my emotions can scare me.
But you know that I'd never lie,
You are my hero, you can save me,
But together we'd be,
A perfect fantasy,
If I got through to you,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
Yeah baby me and you,
We'd be the perfect two.

(continued)

thepells4 • 17 February 2012 at 5:18 PM

I can picture us, holding hands, hearts racing,
Sometimes I get so excited I start pacing,
I haven't really loved someone in ages,
But all I can do is write about you on these pages.
You are like a prince, I want to be your princess,
We could dance together, and I would steal a great kiss.
Maybe I heard lies, or maybe you're just playin',
But I can't wait much longer, and I'm just sayin'.
Don't think that I would act like me,
Without you, 'cuz you make me feel free.
And in time I'll make sure that you see,
We are meant to be...

'Cuz when I'm not with you I cry,
Sometimes my emotions can scare me.
But you know that I'd never lie,
You are my hero, you can save me,
But together we'd be,
A perfect fantasy,
If I got through to you,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
Yeah baby me and you,
We'd be the perfect two.

Oooooohhhhhh...

I'm the only one who doesn't doubt ya,
And sometimes I dream about ya,
I wouldn't wanna live without ya, no.
You always make me smile,
You'll love me in just a while,
Even if we don't walk the aisle,

'Cuz when I'm not with you I cry,
Sometimes my emotions can scare me.
But you know that I'd never lie,
You are my hero, you can save me,
But together we'd be,
A perfect fantasy,
If I got through to you,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
We'd be the perfect two,
Yeah baby me and you,
We'd be the perfect two.

Whaddya think? 😸

(Ping me on @Dreamer please)

smilies • 17 February 2012 at 5:30 PM

@dreamer I just listened to them for the first time, LOVE them!
And I sang this outloud X3
I'd change a few things, like:

If we were together, you'D make me feel SO great,
I spend every night, dreaming 'bout OUR first date.

Sometimes my emotions (!) scare me.
But you know that I'd never lie,
You'RE my hero, you can save me,

You are like a prince, I want to be your princess,
We could dance together, and I would steal YOUR kiss.

Maybe I heard lies, or maybe you're just playin',
But I can't wait much longer, (!) I'm just sayin'.

You could be mean to me but I wouldn't (!) care,
As long as I know (!) you're still standing there.

That just flows better to me, or maybe it's just me 😋

anna914 • 17 February 2012 at 5:40 PM

i love your song dreamer it awesome ❤️ i sing it aloud to kinda softly some part i think need to be change tho but it awesome how it is tho =3 ..... i really like it @dreamer

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 5:40 PM

@Smilies I considered making a couple changes, but it seemed fine to me. 😉

I don't like using exclamation points in my songs though. I don't need to use exclamations to show how I feel. I just use words.

smilies • 17 February 2012 at 5:44 PM

@dreamer Nono, the (!) were to show where I'd removed a word, the CAPS were new words ><

trish • 17 February 2012 at 5:47 PM

@dreamer I sang this in my head, and it's SO AMAZING. 😱 Do you plan on doing a cover on this song?

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 5:50 PM

@Smilies Ohhhhhh. *is an idiot*

Lemme see how your corrections sound:

Correction #1: The word "So" sounds a little crammed in to me, but I might consider chaning you would to "you'd."
Correction #2: I'll fix that. I considered using "or", but forgot. 😋
Correction #3: Ehh... That wouldn't sound right to me.
Correction #4: That would sound better.
Correction #5: That one wouldn't sound right to me either.
Correction #6: I'll think about it.
Correction #7: Maybe...
Correction #8: Nah.

smilies • 17 February 2012 at 5:52 PM

@dreamer Anyway, it sounds really good, you should totally make it! 😊

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 5:56 PM

@Smilies I can't sing well, in my own opinion, but I could try. 😋

And, thanks. 😸

@Trish I could do a cover, IF I could figure out how to upload it, but I can't sing. xD I just do the writing. 😋

smilies • 17 February 2012 at 5:57 PM

@dreamer Know anyone who can? Get @Trish to do it JK X3

trish • 17 February 2012 at 8:39 PM

@smilies I KNOW RIGHT. Harhar. My lungs are for blowing into instruments tho. X)

dreamer • 17 February 2012 at 10:55 PM

I just sang the song in my head using a faster, more upbeat karaoke version of the song instead of the slow one I had planned, and it sounds even better!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3BGW8_6A1gE&feature=endscreen&NR=1

(just ignore the lyrics on that video xD)

momo9 • 22 February 2012 at 1:57 AM

@dreamer
The lyrics are so great. Really like to see them sung though.
And just learnt how to play this. Its so cool.