Dragon Rider Roleplay

just_peachy • 23 June 2012 at 11:26 PM

Hi, I'm Peach! It's nice to meet you!

So, this roleplay isn't on this site, but if you go over here:

http://www.neopets.com/~not_a_praying_mantis
(don't worry it's not on neo either)

then you will find a page explaining all the details and telling you where to go.

You can just send the application to me on here if you don't have an account on neo.

Thanks for looking!

hay7199 • 23 June 2012 at 11:58 PM

Your name: Pan
(What you like to be called)

Your age: 13
(Your real age, please)

How often you get on neopets: I have no Neopets!
(How many times a day or week)

A sample of your writing:

I look over my sholder into his dark brown eyes, "I love you Maria" His soft words hit my face with an impact. I smiled. "I love you to Tyler" I blushed, he acted diffrent. "You know I cant live without you, right?" He asked me. "Yes" I said nodding my head unsure of what this was leading to. "Then I wont have to, right?" He asked me holding a ring. With tears in my eyes I stammered. "N-N-No, You w-w-wont" I said wraping him in an embrasce.

(Thats from a book im writing)

just_peachy • 24 June 2012 at 12:06 AM

It's nice to meet you Pan. I'm also writing a book, it's actually a fantasy that mostly revolves around dragons.

The idea of what you wrote was fantastic, it had wonderful imagery and personality. However, I have noticed a few grammatical errors. If you would be able to tell me them (there are five) I would be more than happy to accept you.

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I actually have to leave for the night. If you are still interested in our roleplay, please send me a message. I really enjoy your writing style, so I hope you're still considering us!