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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:29 PM

Deep in the forest,
The trees will cry,
Of long gone friends,
and sad goodbyes,
but no fear,
mother nature is to hold you,
and your sorrowful tears.

Is this a good poem?

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rainbowkitty • 25 September 2012 at 10:30 PM

@nightlock That brought a tear to my eye. So beautiful! 😊 You should write more poems. 😉

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:31 PM

@rainbowkitty Thanks. I just came up with something.....It popped into my head, and I was like, ohhh good poem 😃

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panda-chan • 25 September 2012 at 10:37 PM

@nightlock
I like it. *enter critque mode* It invokes the feeling of sorrow for the destruction of Mother Earth and Nature. Although it has no rhyeme at the ends (it doesn't need to ever have that. people see to much of it), your poem has a certain beat to the words that I could never get, so two thumbs up from me.

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:38 PM

@panda-chan Thank you.

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iceyfira • 25 September 2012 at 10:39 PM

@nightlock

Epic. =w= b <~~ Thumbs up

Chu wanna hear one of mine? X3

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:40 PM

@iceyfira Sure 😋

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panda-chan • 25 September 2012 at 10:41 PM

@nightlock
I encourage you to right more as you are good. I always get story idea's but never work on them due to me thinking all my art things I do sucks. (Drawing, photography, writing etc.)

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:43 PM

@panda-chan Thank you so much! I do photography sometimes, but just around my house of nature. I took this really good one of a butterfly and I told my family that it was a background from the internet and then later I told them it was mine and they were like OMG!

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iceyfira • 25 September 2012 at 10:51 PM

@nightlock Here is a preview, its very long, actually...

Deep in the foest,
Where bluebirds sing,
And fawns in the meadows,
Prance in glee.
And where the bees and the butterflys,
Flit on without a care,
Away,
From lifes,
Harsh glare.
Tucked away in a cranny,
A pocket of paridise,
A ray of sunshine,
In this cold,
Gray earth.
A place where we can all be free...
With,
Our families.
This corner of paradise,
A secret hideaway.
Its my secret,
In lifes thorny garden...

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:52 PM

@iceyfira I LOVE IT 😋 3 thumbs up

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goku • 25 September 2012 at 10:54 PM

*Cough* Not to BRAG, but, I've written two poems , and both of thm have won National Awards :->







*Proud*

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iceyfira • 25 September 2012 at 10:56 PM

@goku

Not to brag, but how do we know your telling the truth?

@nightlock Is that even possible? You would have to use your feet for that... XP

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 10:57 PM

@iceyfira hmmm.....Well, i really didn't think that through.... OR do I have 3 thumbs??? Mwahhhahhhahhh

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goku • 25 September 2012 at 10:57 PM

@iceyfira ._. You can ask...


@Luigi
and
@pirateseaz
(My two Best Friends in RL)

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iceyfira • 25 September 2012 at 11:00 PM

@goku Lol Im kiddin, but I dont feel like asking. Anyways, my drawing of Ultron got made into a panel of a Marvel comic. =w=

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 11:00 PM

Long ways through the forest,
A burden lay,
A long lost story,
laid in the grave,
many have searched,
but none will find,
the burden that lay in the hollow


Should I add more to this??

@iceyfira

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goku • 25 September 2012 at 11:02 PM

@nightlock I don't get it xD



@iceyfira Into an actual marvel comic published around the world!?

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 11:03 PM

@goku I just came up with something.....

Help me complete my poem!

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iceyfira • 25 September 2012 at 11:04 PM

@goku

Yeah bro. Actually, I made the outline and chiz, and they did the computer part.

@nightlock Nice. =w=

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 11:04 PM

@iceyfira Thanks 😋

The year before last I was the one wearing white,
With the person that loved me most by my side,,
One day after another the waves came crashing between us,
One day here, the next day gone,
Now we are both wearing white,
permanent white silk around us,
haunting the people just like the others in white did to us.

On a scale of 1-10 how good?
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goku • 25 September 2012 at 11:09 PM

@iceyfira .-. Hm....Wow! 8D

@nightlock Too lazy xD I'll post a poem I wrote:



Time:


Time...
It never stops
It flows continously....
In Seconds...
In Minutes...
In Hours...
In Days...
In Weeks...
In Months...
In Years...
In Decades...
In Centuries...
In Millenniums...
We are prisoners of time...
We can't stop time...
So embrace it...
Before time stops us....



^

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nightlock • 25 September 2012 at 11:11 PM

Ok, for everyones poem rank 1-10:
NAME YOUR POEMS
-My last one was called Permanent White


Time- 8

@goku
@iceyfira

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iceyfira • 26 September 2012 at 8:54 AM

Okay, the one I posted was "Secret Paradise" Im not exactly "good" with naming things, but Im awesome with nicknames. =w=

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