Solve my puzzle or help me improve it please?

trish • 14 January 2013 at 9:31 PM

I'm designing a puzzle for another website's contest, and I need your feedback.

Puzzle:

'Here lies 4 spider holes. One is vacated. Three are not. Two will trigger attacks. Two has something shiny in it. Two also has something narrow in it. Take the key from the right spider hole and advance.'

So which spider hole has the key? 😊
(I know, it's a mess. But I really need it to be perfect. >.<)

pebblestar-nightclan • 14 January 2013 at 9:35 PM

@trish
The spider hole on the right? XD

trish • 15 January 2013 at 12:14 AM

@pebblestar-nightclan YES. How long did it take to figure it out & was it confusing/didn't make sense?

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 6:09 AM

@trish
To be honest, it took me a short time. I read through it once, and I was like, "Huh?" I read it again and realized you said "the right spider hole." So that was my guess, I wasn't sure if it was actually right! 😊 And, yeah, it did confuse me quite a bit at first. XD

trish • 15 January 2013 at 8:48 PM

@pebblestar-nightclan What about this?

Here lies 4 spider holes. One is vacated. Three are not. Two will trigger attacks. Take the key from the right spider hole and advance.

Is it simpler or TOO simple?

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 8:49 PM

@trish
I think it's simpler, but not too simple. 😊 Good job, by the way! 😊

trish • 15 January 2013 at 8:50 PM

@pebblestar-nightclan Any ideas on what I could add to make it better?

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 8:51 PM

@trish
I'm not very good at making riddles, so sorry, I have no idea. ☹️

jemmie • 15 January 2013 at 9:27 PM

@trish
How about...

Here lie four spider holes. One is vacated, the others are not. Two will trigger attacks, and two also have something that seems to shine n it. Take the key from the right spider hole and advance to your next destination.

Oh by the way, it's the "right" one. 😃

trish • 15 January 2013 at 9:28 PM

@jemmie Nice but let's try it. ^-^ @pebblestar-nightclan

jemmie • 15 January 2013 at 9:29 PM

@trish
Idk what the heck I'm doing. 😋 just taking out and adding parts I guess. I like solving riddles, I'm bad at making them.

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 9:30 PM

@jemmie @trish
Hmm... The second one seems a bit longer, it may confuse them more. 😊

jemmie • 15 January 2013 at 9:31 PM

@pebblestar-nightclan
Well if it doesn't confuse someone, what's the point of the riddle? xD

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 9:33 PM

@jemmie
I know, I was saying it in a good way. XD

trish • 15 January 2013 at 9:33 PM

@pebblestar-nightclan Point is it's solvable right? xD If they didn't know that it was obviously the 'right' one they would be able to try and solve it?

jemmie • 15 January 2013 at 9:35 PM

@trish
When you make riddles, feel free to make it as confusing as you want. Just make them understandable to read. It can be very difficult, but its best when you can understand it.

That just made no sense. _ _"

pebblestar-nightclan • 15 January 2013 at 9:35 PM

@trish
They would probably try to figure it out, but I'm not sure if they would be able to solve it. I don't know because the 'right' part of it just popped out at me. o.o