LINOBU- New Creature suggestion!

blub • 26 December 2013 at 8:49 PM

@faybaybay
I really like it! I really like the design, and the idea of it and I love the description! Haha, and I love horns 😃
I would love to see this made 😸
A suggestion (ignore if you don't agree); change a bit more about the stages, the first one more like a younger version, or for example smaller horns, or bigger tail in the last stage, so you can see the creature really evolving.
I really really like it! 😃

Deleted • 26 December 2013 at 9:09 PM

@faybaybay I'm on my iPod so I can't get the link but I'm sure it's good,if it comes out,I WANT ONE!! Good luck! 😊 😊

faybaybay • 26 December 2013 at 9:35 PM

@blub Thank you so much! & I do agree with your suggestion, normally I do stuff like that but I was just so eager to finish & I was in a rush so I forgot to tweak the last stage a bit, the only thing different really is more gold leaves and it's a bit bigger, but if I was somehow made, the eggcave artists can do whatever they want. Thanks for your feedback I appreciate it ^^

@katdemon9 Thank you for commenting even though you can't see it, If you get a chance, look at it when you get on a computer 😊 I hope you like it, thanks again!

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purrclan • 26 December 2013 at 10:59 PM

@faybaybay
The description had many run-on sentences, incorrect apostrophe placement, and awkward phrases in general, which I couldn't help correcting:
The new species Linobu is found living near the oases of Ark Desert; they are rumored to be a sub-species of its forest ancestor, the Pandai, but they slowly evolved to adapt to the desert habitat. At one point, when they were first discovered, Arkians tried to keep Linobus as pets, because they resembled a desert version of their Pandai friends. However, they often had recurring nightmares about Linobus' piercing crystal eyes and there were multiple reports of Arkian children going missing. They were immediately released back into the wild, and no one ever tried to domesticate them again.

However, I came up with a more streamlined version for you:
The Linobu is found near the oases of Ark's deserts. Because of their resemblance to the Pandai, scientists believe the two species shared a recent common ancestor. The Pandai are known for their gentleness; this has led many Arkians to unsuccessfully attempt to keep Linoben as pets. However, the mesmerizing gaze of these haunting creatures causes many terror-inspiring nightmares and many more child disappearances. The SAR Center now strongly warns Arkians against owning Linoben.

(I think Linoben is a cool plural form. Other plural suggestions if you disagree: Linobus, Linobu, Linobi...???)

faybaybay • 26 December 2013 at 11:05 PM

@purrclan Thank you for fixing the description ^^ I usually write my descriptions in a hurry, and i'm not too fond of writing them either, so I really appreciate it! Linoben sounds really cool too, so i'll keep that as the plural.

purrclan • 27 December 2013 at 12:02 AM

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First I was like "Linobus looks like it lin-oh-bus so that's weird."
Then I was like "Linobi is cool...but IDK..."
Then I was like "Ooh! Linoben is cool! 😃"

faybaybay • 27 December 2013 at 12:03 AM

@purrclan Linoben sounds fancy, thanks again ^^

purrclan • 27 December 2013 at 12:14 AM

@faybaybay
You're welcome 😊

aedia • 27 December 2013 at 2:14 AM

@faybaybay That's really cute. 😊

coconutpopsicles • 27 December 2013 at 2:29 AM

@faybaybay Wow, it's great! I love the eyes ❤️

faybaybay • 27 December 2013 at 10:56 AM

Thank you both!
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Deleted • 18 July 2016 at 7:22 PM

@faybaybay

Oh WHOA!! 😱 That's so cute/cool/amazing all at the same time!! 😃❤️ Love it! 😃❤️