OMG! HELP!

linpug • 10 September 2011 at 3:44 PM

Calling someone rude won't make you polite. He was just asking for our opinion... No offense.

eternaleyes • 10 September 2011 at 3:51 PM

@avalaingia whatever if it was a opinion ok but you got give some credit for the whole story

linpug • 10 September 2011 at 3:52 PM

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eternaleyes • 10 September 2011 at 3:55 PM

I'm not posting here anymore :/

eternaleyes • 10 September 2011 at 4:01 PM

@avelaingia sorry sorry I get mad easily ☹️ I'm justing trying to help a friend

ladybugheart • 10 September 2011 at 4:02 PM

@goku

I agree with @avelaingia. It was a little redundant, and I think it continued a little too long after it should have stopped. Mickey Mouse might not have been the best choice.

The suspense building up was good, although instead of putting "You'll never guess what I saw!" every time, maybe try something different. 😊

And by the way, Goku didn't "lie", or "trick people" as some said. He told a story. If I write a book in first person point of view, am I lying? He didn't say the story was true. I admit that it would have been more exciting if it had actually happened to him, but there's nothing wrong with what he did. Actually, I think it was really clever how he didn't say if it was real or not, but acted as if it were real. It caught my attention. ;]