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bunnyshadow • 29 March 2012 at 7:21 PM
I need to know if any of these are complex sentences, i need it for my story :C and i need ideas on how to make this better 😸 Prolouge: Deep in the forests of the Kingdom Of Nydeiwen, a large female dragon lay dying in a cave. She once looked beautiful, with a long angled head and sharp teeth lining her mouth. Spikes trailed down her neck and down her body, except for the middle of her back where a large saddle sat for her rider. She was a golden yellow color, with glittering scales, and her wings were 16 feet long and feathered yellow and occasionally gold feathers appeared. Her limbs were elegant and she had bright yellow eyes. Kyofu put his hand on her head, and she looked up at him with her now dull eyes. Good bye Gorua. He said to the dragon, through the mind-speak all dragon riders possessed. If you were lucky enough to hatch a dragon, you would be able to communicate with him/her through your mind. Gorua put her long neck down on her front limbs, and closed her eyes, and her breathing ceased. The dragon had believed that she had died from an attack from behind at the end of a bottle, for there was a sword still stuck through her right calf, but in truth, Kyofu was the one who had stabbed her when she turned to face the last of the enemy army. Kyofu laughed maliciously, his black bangs sweeping across his face, covering his dark blue eyes. He yelled at the dead body of the dragon,? ~~~
nightmare • 29 March 2012 at 7:21 PM
"Your finally dead, you filthy beast!". Kyofu turned towards his servant and ordered him to put horseshoes on his large black war horse, before escaping. While the servant put the horseshoes on the horse, Kyofu strided towards what was left of Gorua, and picked up four large smooth stones from her side. Dragon Eggs. The first was a smooth and white with golden veins and small yellow speckles made a stripe down the middle. The second was entirely black with a silver glow surrounding the outer layer of the egg, a brighter whiter glow seemed to be coming from the middle, and it radiated warmth. The third egg was a dark purple shade and seemed to gradient black at the bottom. The final egg was silver with black raindrop like shape towards the very bottom of the egg. Before putting the eggs in his horse?s saddlebags, he wrapped them in black scarves to keep them hidden from any guards or dragon?s with riders patrolling the sky for any intruders. Kyofu mounted his horse and with a sharp kick at the sides of the horse, he rode out of the cave into the forest and overgrown trail beyond.
bunnyshadow • 29 March 2012 at 8:00 PM
hello？
karamel • 30 March 2012 at 10:16 AM
@bunnyshadow I can correct the grammar and punctuation if you'd like.
phoenixfox • 30 March 2012 at 10:25 AM
@bunnyshadow@nightmareI am interested in reading more. I had a dream about a writer going through writer's block last night. Please continue!!
hedwig68 • 30 March 2012 at 10:27 AM
@bunnyshadow that is so sad ☹️