I'll give you a cookie if you look at this!

sarahzafirah • 18 June 2012 at 4:52 AM

*gives cookie* Thanks. X3

Anyway, I wanted to tell you about my new story! It's here. It hasn't got a title yet, but if you can think one up for me I'll give you another cookie. I love writing mystery stories.
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So here is my story (Chapter 1):

Tirmingham Academy. A place where dreams come true, or at least I thought it would be. A recent kidnap crime has been committed at the school, and now the staff are keeping the students under full security. I was one of them who witnessed the crime.

It all started at the beginning of a new term at the Academy. I had been there for 2 years, and I knew all the teachers. You wouldn't know me as a girl who was popular. You would know me as a really shy girl who actually is a daughter of a detective.
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So there I was, minding my own business, sitting on a bench near the lake. Students hardly ever went there since it's only been known to a few who came at the opening of the school. I flipped a page of my book, smiling when I came to this part where the main character finally returns home after being on a year's holiday in Rome.

A lock of maroon hair falls over my eyes and I push it back. The school bells start to ring and I place my bookmark into the book and close it. I button up my red blazer, straighten my blouse, pull up my striped tie and stretch my socks above my knees. I was ready. Ready or a fresh start of memory, ready for... Madelyn.
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Please post so I can continue with the next chapter! And I;ll give you another cookie!

kollais • 18 June 2012 at 5:01 AM

*posting*

sarahzafirah • 18 June 2012 at 6:41 AM

@kollais *gives cookie to you* Thanks. 😊
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(Chapter 2)

Madelyn. The most selfish and arrogant girl I have met in my entire life. She thinks she rules the school, since the plaque near the library says:

Great thanks to Mr Goldworthy, for donating cash to build this library made out of pure money. Also great thanks to his daughter, Madelyn Goldworthy.
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As the teachers rounded up the students, I broke into a sweat thinking who the Head Prefect for this year would be. Doubting Madelyn would even make in, I calmed down remained in that position until the new class monitors were announced.

"Ivy Hicks as Science Class Monitor."

"Gina Ryde as Math Class Monitor.

"Khalissa Ade as Literature Class Monitor."

They kept on going on. And on. And on. When I heard Madelyn's name, a sharp pain went through my head and I felt dizzy. Really dizzy.

"Madelyn Goldworthy as Head Prefect."

And after the "Head Prefect" word, I fainted.
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I awoke in the Sick Room, with Nurse Poppy fanning me with a wet flannel. Trying to sit up, I feel sick in the stomach and my head falls down on the pillow again. Just think - with Madelyn as Head Prefect she has more power. Already having three marionettes/parrots following her around - Daisy, Mira and Tiana - I think she has more than enough things to handle.
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Please post so I can do the next chapter!

whispers • 18 June 2012 at 9:21 AM

@sarahzafirah
nice
post

pinkred • 18 June 2012 at 9:31 PM

@sarahzafirah
*eats cookies*
Posty McPosty Post

Deleted • 18 June 2012 at 9:34 PM

@sarahzafirah Can I have a cookie?

sarahzafirah • 18 June 2012 at 9:46 PM

@whispers Cookie for you! 😃 Thanks. Extra cookie for you! 😃
@blackdeathkitty Here you go. 😸 A cookie for you!!
@pinkred D:< ... but I have an endless army of cookies that will bring you joy!!! So, yeah, you can eat them.
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"...then you just collapsed. Miss Grimm told me to bring you here. Don't worry, you can afford to miss your lesson for a few hours." says Nurse Poppy, relieved that I was still alive. My eyed widened as I stared at the clock. "How long have I been here?!" I asked, panicky. I was a straight-A student, but I still can't afford to miss lessons!

"3 hours, 4?"

"WHAT?! Sorry, Nurse Poppy, but I really have to head to Science class now. Thanks for the help!"

I force on my clothes over my white singlet and underwear. My hair was in a real mess, so I combed it, untangling the frizzy, unconditioned, dark maroon tangles in my hair, rushing to the lab.
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"There you are. We were expecting you, Miss Miranda." greeted Mrs Wellson. I bowed slightly. She pointed to Madelyn's table. "Your lab partner for today will be Madelyn." I rolled my eyes and pursed my mouth. I broke into a sweat thinking about what she had planned for me today.

"Hi there," squeakily said Madelyn, tossing her blonde hair. "Why aren't you with Dorothy today? She seems sad. And I want that." I looked at my best friend, Dorothy. She was partnered up with Isabella, the most quiet girl in class.

Deleted • 18 June 2012 at 9:47 PM

@sarahzafizarah Can I have a cookie? Post

jubjubloversboy • 18 June 2012 at 10:01 PM

@sarazafizarah Cookie? POST

bunnyshadow • 18 June 2012 at 10:01 PM

Post. The intro was interesing but it's getting boring again 😋

sarahzafirah • 19 June 2012 at 4:53 AM

@blackdeathkitty Alright. Another cookie for you. X3
@bunnyshadow Yeah I know. XD This just popped into my head so don't expect a really good story. The twist is coming soon, don't worry! Oh yeah, cookie for you. 😸
@jubjubloversboy *gives cookie*
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You might probably not know Isabella. She quiet, but brainy. Won several awards for being the best student in the class. And what did she get? A pencil. Isabella's really trying to fit in with the rest of us, but oddly we feel that she really isn't trying.

Later...

"Class is dismissed. Single file and head to the cafeteria." boomed Mrs Wellson. As always, Madelyn was right in front. She pulled on my ponytails - hard. "Ow! What did you do that for, Madelyn?!"

"I- I was just playing..."

"Don't think I saw you putting in those eyedrops, missy!!"

Crocodile tears welled up in Madelyn's eyes and it turned into such a big scene. Her parrots bawled too. Imaginary steam rose up from my ears and I just lost it. Pouncing on Madelyn, Mrs Wellson pulled me up and sent me for detention.

She told me to scribble "I will not pounce on the Head Prefect." a hundred times on the chalkboard. Lucky for me, I busted out of there using my hair pin and a pencil. I studied lock-breaking in Elementary!

Dorothy was sitting with Khalissa, Gina, Isabella and Ivy at table 9. I must be plain dead. Dorothy would never sit with them - ever! You know, I'm starting to think that she's not right for me.

Deleted • 19 June 2012 at 5:09 AM

@sarahzafirah
Interesting...
Hey, can I have a cookie!? ❤️
Also... when are we going to finish Scarlett's story? 😃 😃 😃

angelofgrotesque • 19 June 2012 at 5:44 AM

@sarahzafirah THIS is the only "Cookie" I want

http://savvylifemagazine.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/01/newpixcropped-1016x1024.jpg

lol ya know. from neds declassified. he's all grown up now and beautiful T_T

sarahzafirah • 19 June 2012 at 7:04 AM

@meringue It's your turn to write the next paragraph! x3 We're gonna finish it, promise. Oh yeah. *cookie for you*
@angelofgrotesque 😱 He's so beautiful!! TT^TT Ah well.
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I shuffled down to the field, and started to pick some wild dandelions that grow there. Looking up, I saw a man. Yes, a man. He wasn't wearing the parent pass. And Charlie was next to him. My knees felt like jelly but it stood to the spot. I was too scared to do anything. My glasses fell off and the man noticed.

Absent-mindedly, I sped off, crawling into the tunnel that leads to the bench and lake. Flies crawled on me but I tried not to move. I'd be a goner. Peeking, I saw the man put her into a potato sack and jump over the barbed wire fence in a flash. Who does he think he is - Usain Bolt?! With a slightly grazed knee and a minor twisted ankle, I picked up my glasses and spent the rest of my day in my room.
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"Hey, buddy. I saw everything. What are you doing in here?" asked Dorothy.

"Go away."

"Why?"

"I'm not in the mood for visitors at this hour."

"'kay. Let me know is you need help."

Dorothy shut the door and the moment she slipped out of my sight, I threw a terrible temper tantrum.
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Sorry for this chapter. It's a little short. 😋 I wrote like, 3 chapters in a day so I'm gonna take a rest. Anyway, check out my free stories that I can do for you: http://eggcave.com/forums/topic/24419

Deleted • 19 June 2012 at 7:21 AM

@sarahzafirah
Oh. 😱
Thanks for the cookie!

cole • 19 June 2012 at 4:17 PM

thankies for cookie my fellow muffin?! *thinks wtf*

pinkred • 21 June 2012 at 10:39 AM

@sarahzafirah
When are you going to post the next chapter?