Orphanage (re-do) P R I V I T E

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 12:43 PM

@bluebelle Mary Sue alert! Seriously? ;-; Cuts her arm on the railing, then drops unconscious? And if Minty has forgotten her mom, then why does she react like that to realizing her dad killed her mom? Why does she faint? >>
@rojoqueen Yep, like that. 😊 And I understand that, but if you hate your parents so much you want them to die and they hate you back, I doubt you'd turn out a troublemaker with strong spirit... ^^"
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With her hand on the doorknob, Aizel was ready to barge in when a small voice cut her thouhts off and she whirled around to see Brendon standing on the stairway.
"...Well... Stalking I guess. I don't know where I'm supposed to sleep." she paused for a second, picking up the loaded rucksack from the floor, hauling it over her shoulder again. "If you know... then I'd love some help - I don't exactly feel like barging in on strangers, really."

seaangel • 28 December 2012 at 12:49 PM

@jupiter_hollow

Hmm, I guess so, but please let me point out, Ally's parents died when she was little and she barely remembers them. How can you mourn for someone when you barely know them?

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Ally looked at the two newest additions. They seemed so weird for someone who just arrived. What happened to them for them to have so weird personalities. The girl wondered a bit too much, but seemed to ignore it.

"So, why are you two here. Well, what I mean is what happened to you to end up here in this wretched place?" Ally said smiling a bit.

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 12:50 PM

@seaangel If you grow up without parents, switching to one foster home to another, I doubt you'd be confident in yourself, with nobody to love you truly .-. Just pointing that out >>

rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 12:50 PM

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Your right I guess I didn't think it through,*facepalms*
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@bluebelle
Bad marysue's blue.

Mercedes
Messed with the chair leg, and watched the other's wondering if their lives had been any better than hers.

she wondered if she would be in trouble for breaking the chair,
her parents would be screaming at her if it had been their chair.

She breathed a bit shaky realizing she was terrified of being punished putting her head between her knees trying to fall asleep.
Every time she tried to sleep she woke up to the sound of people walking around.

(she should be in trouble for 'breaking' the chair)

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 12:54 PM

@bluebelle @rojoqueen (it's the ...uh... morning o.o And Big Bessy is sleeping in another room, practically deaf to everything XD) @seaangel
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spiritwolf3 • 28 December 2012 at 12:54 PM

Brendon stuttered a bit with words before getting some out 'U-Um, you're upstairs...just s-saying...' he said scratching the back of his head awkwardly 'Would you like me to show you which room...?' he said silently lifting his head finally and pushing a small curl off his face.

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ninjagirl • 28 December 2012 at 12:55 PM

@bluebelle I'm not DEAD. I just like to play pokemon. >w>
@jupiter_hollow OH NO XD ... Golden skunk ;]
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Sighing, Katia stood and turned to hop up the stairs. She would have to go back to her room, it was beginning to get crowded...
As she reached the top, she noticed Aizel and Brendon discussing.. Well, whatever they were discussing really. She paused cocking her head. Information was a valuable thing, but she didn't want to eavesdrop again. She had been caught once. Oh well, she would just have to join in to the.. Conversation. She shuddered. That was, if they'd let her.
Now the problem was how to join in. She lingered behind Brendon for a bit, shuffling her feet awkwardly before deciding it wasnt worth it and slipping past them to venture back to her own room.

rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 12:56 PM

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I know,just when she wakes up and see's the chair is broken.Will read it * salute's* 😊
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bluebelle • 28 December 2012 at 12:56 PM

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Ok I am going to empty the post and redo it I feel so stupid. She only dropped unconscious cause she won't eat rotten meat I need to totally redo that. So sorry,I am going to stalk earlier post pay attention to the patterns and the way they do things in the Orphanage. Thanks so much for calling my bluff.*salutes to awesomeness*
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rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 1:05 PM

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Do all the people at the orphanage have their own room?or do they share their room with other orphans? I am confused.
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Mercedes
Decided to try the stairs again,
The last time she had been on stairs she had been pushed down them and had broken her arm.
she walked toward the stairs and looked up at them"they aren't that bad"she said to herself
And stepped on the first step it creaked as she stepped on it
she pulled on her shirt collar a bit sweating in fear of being pushed again.

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 1:07 PM

@rojoqueen Yep, she will. 😋 @bluebelle Do you guys need some time to read what happened previously? It's about... eh, four pages xD
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Glancing at the boy from underneat her rucksack, Aizel nodded slowly, noting herself of his flustered movements. He had looked to be a troublemaker kind - smoking, tattoed and so on... But truly, she realized, he was awfully shy. The Orphanage seemed to have changed so many people, she mused on that for a moment, before looking up again.
"Sure, lead the way." she offered lightly.
A faint sound of shuffling feet caught her attention and she poked her head behind Brendon's back in a comical manner, etending her neck to see Rainbow standing nearby.
"Hey-" she was cut off by the girl zooming past and pulled away to prevent bumping into her. "w-wait... where are y-.." she scratched the back of her head awkwardly, raising an eyebrow as the girl departed to her room.

ninjagirl • 28 December 2012 at 1:16 PM

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Katia raised her head, her hand on the doorknob. The girl, aizel, had been saying something. Perhaps she should go back. She cocked her head.
Perhaps she should form an alliance with the two. After all, they were the ones she tolerated most.
With the thought concluding in her head, she padded back down the hallway. 'I.. Uh. Hi.' She muttered quietly.

^SEE THAT YEAH THAT IS THE EXTREMELY SHORTENED VERSION ;-;

rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 1:16 PM

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I read it already.
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Mercedes
She stepped on the second step which groaned under her weight.
She wondered why she wasn't very heavy for her age,
she forced her self up the third step then raced up the last ones
She looked down at the steps feeling,
like she conquered her fear then realized she would have to go back down them.
she hung her head low then peeked in the rooms curiously.
watching the people in the rooms.

spiritwolf3 • 28 December 2012 at 1:21 PM

Brendon nodded slowly and began to ascend up the staircase but looked back. He seemed to be waiting patiently, tapping his foot gently and bit his lip. The air was very dusty and caused Brendon to cough slightly but he quickly discarded it. His breathing was the only thing he himself could hear. But he soon heard the distant groggy snoring of the Hag somewhere in the upstairs bedrooms. He watched the younger girl Katia and cocked his head confused. He wondered why she was always leaving, well he too was the same so he tossed that question away fast.

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jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 1:41 PM

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'Hey." she greeted back the smallish girl, rather surprised she'd come back. She seemed unwilling to communicate with anyone, but Aizel had to admit, so was she... "You seem to like it in there." she motioned to Katia's room, smiling lightly, meanwhile climbing the stairs backwards, with her back to the upper floor.
Her ears pipcked up the snoring.
"...Wait, who else is on that floor? It's nea the hag's room." she mused absentmindedly, going up.

ninjagirl • 28 December 2012 at 1:48 PM

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Katia nodded, following the two. 'I guess it's the place where no one can bug me.' She shrugged, shuddering as the witch's snoring became louder.

Why is it so SHORT I'm sorry I'm too excited right now XD

rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 1:50 PM

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Do all the people at the orphanage have their own room?or do they share their room with other orphans?
@bluebelle

Mercedes
looked around boredly pacing the floor,
when she saw it " a mouse"she cried jumping onto the railing
animals of any kind scared her she had never seen a mouse ,before but could tell it was a mouse.
she sat upon the railing and looked over the edge
she jumped of the railing terrified she looked around
the mouse had ran off she sighed relieved.

bluebelle • 28 December 2012 at 1:51 PM

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retry
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Minty got up,breathing in and out like her instructor had told her to. Minty jumped hearing her stomach growl hitting her head...again. "I'm starving,"Minty thought."I'd better go eat." Minty hurriedly ran to the kitchen. She pulled on the fridge handle, and got thrown back as the fridge opened. She ripped out a bag of green beans and looked at it, inspecting it thoroughly. It had some nasty white stuff on it, so she put it back and pulled out another,some more white stuff and another and another. She pulled out the first one again,and ate it. Mainly because it had less mold,and food here was not to be questioned. After eating she went and lay down for a nap.

spiritwolf3 • 28 December 2012 at 1:54 PM

Brendon looked down 'The hag's room is the last one on the left..and we mostly all sleep on that floor..' he muttered following the duo up the stairs. 'You should be quiet, if you disturb her, she will fly into a rage..' he said, his voice turning into less than a whisper. His footsteps seemed to lighten also.

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@rojoqueen They share with others c;
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rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 2:02 PM

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ok i was just confused about it earlier .
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Mercedes
walked towards where bessie's room was she heard snoring,
She had not been warned or told about her by anyone
She almost peeked in but heard bessie snore loud which made her jump a bit.
looking around she felt lonelier than she had ever been even, though her parents ignored her she had felt like someone was their for her.
It had been comforting.

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 2:03 PM

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A small nod from her side signalled she would keep quiet. When they got to the last step, however, she glanced around the corner, locating the source of the snores - a large mahogany door at the end of the hallway.
"What is she? Queen or something?" she protested, a bit louder than needed, but her voice didn't stirr the silence.
"Where do you guys sleep?" she followed Brendon, occsionally glancing behind to assure Katia's there.

spiritwolf3 • 28 December 2012 at 2:25 PM

'She sure acts like one..so she is probably is the queen around here..' Brendon whispered 'I-I sleep the room across and I am not sure where Katia sleeps.. I don't share a room since I'm the only guy here..' he muttered louder than he intended to and straight away shut his mouth sighing in relief when he didn't hear any change from the witches room.

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rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 2:37 PM

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Mercedes
over heard people talking and walked towards their voices,
she saw two girls and a boy talking"hello?"she asked shyly
watching them"who's snoring ?"she said looking at bessie's room.her breathing was shaky she was scared of what they thought of her.

ninjagirl • 28 December 2012 at 2:52 PM

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Katia pointed to a room on the right. 'Mine. I don't share it.. The Big fat witch says I might have to share it with a newbie sometime. I don't want to though.. It's the only place I actually feel alone.' She explained.

jupiter_hollow • 28 December 2012 at 3:09 PM

@ninjagirl @spiritwolf3 GRRRRR! Writer's block! Dx
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Nodding at Brendon and Kati absentmindedly, Aizel paused in the middle of the hall, scratching the back of her neck awkwardly. She still didn't know where her room was, but guessed most of the rooms upstairs were free.
"Well... Then I guess I'll find my own room too."

rojoqueen • 28 December 2012 at 3:39 PM

@jupiter_hollow @ninjagirl @spiritwolf3 @bluebelle @seaangel
I try to rp with you guys but you keep ignoring me. for some reason....

jupiter_hollow • 29 December 2012 at 4:25 AM

@rojoqueen Didn't mean to >> I accidentally posted after you and was waiting for someone else to post so I can repost. 😋

rojoqueen • 29 December 2012 at 8:14 AM

@jupiter_hollow
oh ,I was very confused I thought I was being purposely ignored.

Mercedes
over heard people talking and walked towards their voices,
she saw two girls and a boy talking"hello?"she asked shyly
watching them"who's snoring ?"she said looking at bessie's room.her breathing was shaky she was scared of what they thought of her.

spiritwolf3 • 2 January 2013 at 4:39 PM

Brendon cocked his head to the right 'Oh, that's the hag snoring..' he muttered in a low voice and glanced down the hallway. His hair fell onto his face as he sighed loudly but he didn't notice the snoring had stopped...


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rojoqueen • 2 January 2013 at 4:47 PM

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Mercedes "whats the hag?"she asked curiously and a little loudly looking at the door she heard the snoring stop"what ever it is it's no longer asleep" she announced backing away from the door she heard footsteps in the room"and its going to come out"she said whispering a bit