Rate my song, please ^^

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 11:54 AM

Okay, so this is a song I wrote all myself..its only partial..i dont wanna give away the whole thing ^^

You know im not the best at things
I thought, you were meant for me
thought we were meant to be
It's hard for me to speak out
really, ya know im not that loud
i have a voice tucked inside
too afraid just to say what it's looking for

chorus:
wheredya go (x3)
my superhero
whydya leave(x3)
leave me
whydya leave me here
in the middle of nowhere
stranded here
wheredya go(x3)
my former superhero


5 =awesome
4=great
3=good
2=eh
1=bleh

remember, its only part of it

meixiaotian • 22 August 2011 at 11:55 AM

bump
I'm too lazy to think about whether its good or bad 😋
@isablah

linpug • 22 August 2011 at 11:57 AM

bump

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 11:57 AM

@meixiaotian
lol ^^

meixiaotian • 22 August 2011 at 11:57 AM

bump

rosey77 • 22 August 2011 at 11:59 AM

4.5 😉 It has cool lyrics, you just say the same stuff a lot, like "wheredya go" and "leave." 😋 But I would like to see it in song version. 😊

meixiaotian • 22 August 2011 at 12:00 PM

bump

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 12:00 PM

@rosey77
thanks ^^
i wrote it after a friend ditched me xP
but its only partial cause..i have songwriter block!! im outta ideas XD

meixiaotian • 22 August 2011 at 12:02 PM

bump

linpug • 22 August 2011 at 12:04 PM

@whispers 4.5 the superhero thing is kinda weird, i don't think it matches XD

rosey77 • 22 August 2011 at 12:06 PM

I like the superhero thing. 😋 Maybe just "my hero?"

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 12:06 PM

@linpug
well. i put superhero cause my friend acted like a 'hero' for me for the bullies, so then she ditched me..so thats why i put it

@arabianninja
please look

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linpug • 22 August 2011 at 12:09 PM

yeah, i like hero better 😊

qwaszx • 22 August 2011 at 12:17 PM

A sang it out loud! So cool! @whispers I'm writing a song too! Wanna be song buddies? (5)

redfire77 • 22 August 2011 at 12:25 PM

@whispers I think it's a 3. *is slapped*
Wait! Let me explain why!
Okies, I think it's good, but the verse doesn't really have a beat? I tried to sing it to myself, and I probably just have suckish melody ideas, but I couldn't get the words that rhyme to be on the same beat D:

I feel like if this song were played on the radio, it would be played on Radio Disney. Wait! Let me explain!
Like other people have said, 'superhero' sounds pretty weird, and also suggests childish-ness. I agree that 'hero' would work better. Also, the lyrics in general suggest that a younger girl would sing it.

I also think that the lyrics sorta lean too much on the 'tough break up with boyfriend' side, especially when it says:
"I thought, you were meant for me
thought we were meant to be"
The above lyrics sound like more of a break up with a boyfriend song. You know what I mean? You could replace it with something with this sort of nature:
"I thought our bond was so strong,
That nothing could ever go wrong"
Or something like that. *fail attempt at writing lyrics*

Okay, I'm done critiquing, so now you can troll XD

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 12:35 PM

@redfire77
ok ^^ thanks for the advice.

@qwaszx
kk ^^

arabianninja • 22 August 2011 at 12:52 PM

@whispers Without the melody (I just can't find one fitting it, so it's hard to imagine) I give it 4.5 😃 I LOVE to hear you singing it!

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 12:57 PM

@arabianninja
i would love to sing and post on youtube..but my parents dont approve of youtube..at all ^^"

arabianninja • 22 August 2011 at 12:57 PM

@whitefall awww ... try another page instead XD

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 1:01 PM

@arabianninja
wait...huh?

isablah • 22 August 2011 at 1:45 PM

4 I can think of some melodies, but there are a couple words that just don't fit for me...

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 2:41 PM

BUMP ^^

whitefall • 22 August 2011 at 2:43 PM

@arabianninja

Lol, why'd you ping me? xD

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 2:45 PM

@whitefall
I dunno why she pinged you xD
Did you get my message?
this is your lil' sibling, but in her new account...if you didnt already know

whitefall • 22 August 2011 at 8:39 PM

Yeah, I know. ^-^
So, how's everything? (Like on EggCave...)

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 9:09 PM

@whitefall
ok ^^ trying to get some good eggs, like some CCs, cause i cant get it XD

qwaszx • 22 August 2011 at 9:15 PM

@whispers This happened to me today

Oh, oh, oh.
M,m,m
Honey I walked into class and sa-a-a-t next toooo yoooou.
I buried my nose in my book while y-o-o-ou joked around.
But I nearly drooped the b-o-o-ok when you said that word, honey.
I acted like I didn't care but I'd like you to know Honey,

Chorus:
You crushed my dreams.
You ripped my heart in two.
You tore me into little pieces.
And threw me away.
You said No.
You know when you said N-o-o-o
I nearly cried right there in the middle of math.

whispers • 22 August 2011 at 9:22 PM

@qwaszx
lol & aww ☹️
your crush dumbed you?

meixiaotian • 22 August 2011 at 9:22 PM

bump

qwaszx • 22 August 2011 at 9:24 PM

@whispers Yes... v.v