Rate my song, please ^^

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rileytibbles • 22 August 2011 at 9:25 PM

@whispers
4😊

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roversydneygirl • 22 August 2011 at 9:37 PM

100000000 million! I love it! Don't change the 'my superhero' part, it is PERFECT!

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whispers • 23 August 2011 at 10:24 AM

@roversydneygirl
thanks ^^

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roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 10:25 AM

Oh, it's nothing. 😊

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whispers • 23 August 2011 at 1:17 PM

BUMP!
I'm pinging random people I've heard of ^^
@chloekins
@ian <-cuz he sings ^^
@zac
@meteoroid
@cafe
@sycake
@redstar-fireclan
@arcticwonders
@belle
@icymuffin
@darcy_vasquez
@glados
@stellie
@pegausa
@fluffy
@pwuffy
@blackrose_chan
@pipkitten
@chatial
@dreamer

OK, thats all I can think of right now ^^

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cafe • 24 August 2011 at 6:16 AM

ojfdofj

I've been pinged? o_o

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 6:22 AM

@cafe
yes, i pinged any random person i could think of, maybe you could rate my song, you dont have too though

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cafe • 24 August 2011 at 6:26 AM

I like it, but it's a tad repetitive, I'd change super hero to hero, as suggested, and you should use better grammar 😸 Or, more like capitalize letters where they're needed.

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 6:32 AM

@cafe
k
cause there are certain sounds i wanna make with the words, then i dont use right grammar XD
thanks for the advice though ^^

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roversydneygirl • 24 August 2011 at 7:38 AM

I'm in the song business now, too.

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 7:43 AM

@roversydneygirl
ive been writing songs for like two years now XD and i still dont have 25 finished XD

@celeste
@pegasasu
@fluffy
@pendmxc
you guys should see my song on pg. one!

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roversydneygirl • 24 August 2011 at 8:17 AM

Heh, that's funny! LOL

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lunarstarz • 24 August 2011 at 8:29 AM

What does Bump mean?
@whispers hello again πŸ˜ƒ
I must point out that it would sound lovely, but I do not know your voice, nor the beat. Expression plays an extremely important role in speaking to others, and in music it's vital to have good expression.

So not knowing the tone you may be singing in, I admit I don't know how to rate you.
But I will say that it sounds like it would be a great song! I'm not sure what the beat will be, or the music, but I can tell that it will sound nice.

In my opinion, Lyrics account for 2/10, Expression and tone for 8/10. But either way, I like the song.

Sometimes the best way to tell a story or tell your feelings is to mask it a bit and show it in creative arts like poetry and music. That way some people can just look at poems or listen to music for fun, but when looked deeper, the true meaning is revealed. It's a way of letting everyone know about it, yet not know about it... if that makes any sense

P.S. Now that I realise it, for a newcomer, I feel like I'm being a teacher trying to give advice... and yet I'm a horrible leader πŸ˜ƒ

Oh I almost forgot!
4 out of 5
And for whatever 'Bump' may mean...

BUMP

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 8:32 AM

@lunarstarz
thanks ^^
bumping is like, bringing a topic back to life..i quess XD im not to sure what it is exactly for though XD

Deleted • 24 August 2011 at 8:33 AM

@whispers 4! I loves it, but I feel the rest of the song may count for higher scores.. πŸ˜‰ *scavenges for knowledge* πŸ˜ƒ I tried singing it myself, and it's catchy, but my voice isn't that great after I just woke up. *GIANT YAWN* πŸ˜‹ I try to write my own songs, but it never works out really well because I don't write the lyrics down, and don't have a cam-recorder. XIπŸ˜‹

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 8:37 AM

@choocalate
thanks..and what do you mean?? e.e

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sotheavey • 24 August 2011 at 8:38 AM

bump ^-^

Deleted • 24 August 2011 at 8:41 AM

@whispers I like knowledge, even if it isn't the best for me all the time. *looks on earlier comments* Although, apparently, you have a songwriter's block πŸ˜‰ It doesn't matter though. I still give it a 4, as of right now.οΏ½ πŸ˜‰ And for some reason it reminds me of S.O.S. by Rihanna. Don't ask me why. >.< XP

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 8:43 AM

@choocalate
oh ^^ thanks
it was about a friend ditching me, nothing bout love, but oh well thanks! ^^ ill take any suggestions

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pegasasu • 24 August 2011 at 12:02 PM

@whispers maybe you could do just "my hero". But overall
5 πŸ˜ƒ You know I'll say that for all your songs tho buddy 😊

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whispers • 24 August 2011 at 3:00 PM

@pegasasu
yeah i do XD

@fluffy
@ian
@ian
@ian
PLEASE RATE MY SONG 😊

Deleted • 25 August 2011 at 9:13 AM

@whispers, thanks for your ping sorry about that XD I like the lyrics so far so I would rate it a 3, mostly because I can't hear the melody in my head and don't know where you want to go with it, but if you had a really awesome melody to go with it, and with these really good lyrics I think it would be an awesome song to play periodically on my ipod or phone, but I would definitely download it.

I don't have much experience with this type of thing, I'm mostly a writer, so I can't really judge songs because they're completely different in ways but they're similar. But being completely unbiased to the ways of song writing. I would say that this is really good so far and if you had the completely lyrics I would maybe rate it a 4.5 😊

Deleted • 25 August 2011 at 12:04 PM

3 here is a litle bit of a song i made

why did you leave me here
in the middie of no where
i felt noting in till now
i was good only you could make me great
why did we break up
we both liked the same things

will you rate mine to? post on my wall if you want hear more later i will have a tidle😊

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whispers • 25 August 2011 at 5:43 PM

@ian
@redstar-fireclan
@rin
@yogurt
@ian

Bump~

Deleted • 25 August 2011 at 5:44 PM

@whispers why did you ping me? xD

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redstar-fireclan • 25 August 2011 at 5:44 PM

@whispers
My rate= 1.
I'm sorrry!
I just don't get it very well, and well. idk.

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yogurt • 25 August 2011 at 5:46 PM

@whispers
I don't get the song because I don't get any song unless i can hear the beat xD but the meaning is about a 3/4 great job!

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whispers • 25 August 2011 at 5:46 PM

@rin
to rate the song
i dont want this to die v.v
so im pinging 5 peeps every time to rate it ^^

@redstar-fireclan
its k ^^
everyone has their own opinion ^^

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redstar-fireclan • 25 August 2011 at 5:48 PM

@whispers Yea...
Oh, posted i WOTF

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@whispers Oh okay. >A>

4.5? I read you saying on here earlier that this was about your friend, and the whole 'superhero' thing makes it sound like it was about a boy/break-up kind of thing.
I read the reason why you put superhero too, but.. I don't know it still sounds a little odd. Dx
And I was singing it to myself, but I couldn't really find a good beat to sing it with.. some of the lines didn't match up. ;A;

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