Rate my song, please ^^

whispers • 25 August 2011 at 5:54 PM

@rin
yeah...>.< it kinda has a weird beat..it kinda makes the words rhyme, but i get what your saying ^^

@potato

lillia • 25 August 2011 at 5:54 PM

5
Love it!

whispers • 25 August 2011 at 6:01 PM

@lillia
thanks ^^

cirrus • 25 August 2011 at 6:20 PM

@whispers

Ok, first, it sounds like a break up, you broke my heart, I thought I loved you type of song.

Second, the verse has an odd number of lines, you need to either add one line such as so I gotta be strong, won't won't wonder anymore, or change that line to a shorter one such as so I'm askin' you. because the line that leads into the chorus shouldn't be the longest line, and it should be an ood number.

Third, on the line really, ya know I'm not that loud. You need to either say "yea really ya know I'm not that loud" or you need to take out the really.

Fourth, the chorus, wow, um first, for the where and why daya go, it shouldn't say wheredaya go 3 times, it should say wheredaya 3 times and go 1 time. Also, I think the beat would be even MORE unbalanced if you changed it to hero instead of superhero, so eith make the line my hero longer, or just keep it superhero. But I still am not the biggest fan of superhero. And last the wheredaya go at the end needs to be cut, it's needs to just be my former superhero, not wheredaya go may former superhero.

I am sorry I have written so much and it's not because your song is bad, it just needs work like anything, my english teacher says that all writing can be made better but nothing can be made perfect.

potato • 25 August 2011 at 6:32 PM

4
Awesome song 😊

whispers • 27 August 2011 at 7:33 PM

bump ^^
@kitty19cat
@ian
@mangyrawr
@graystripe99

graystripe99 • 29 August 2011 at 12:20 PM

I rate it a 4 c:

zummiee • 29 August 2011 at 12:29 PM

Kinda hard to rate since I have no idea what the tune is xD I give it a 4.75 😉 Very good lyrics 😋

whispers • 29 August 2011 at 5:12 PM

bump
@joy
@belle
@ian
@pendmxc
@evilyowling

rawrcookies08 • 3 December 2011 at 9:56 PM

@whispers its pretty good, but I don't know because I can't hear it (haha) so maybe you could post a video or voice memo of you singing it? 😊

whispers • 3 December 2011 at 9:59 PM

@rawrcookies08
No way no way no way no way
to many stalkers out there... never would i. ever. period. im not risking my life

rawrcookies08 • 3 December 2011 at 10:01 PM

@whispers I know haha right! But I mean you could do a voice memo (like on an iPod) where it is only your voice and no video or picture of you, only sound. And you could post that. That's what I meant haha

whispers • 3 December 2011 at 10:04 PM

@rawrcookies08
mine don't do that -_-
still maybe they could find out where i live..and kidnapp me! D: like that would happen..but still..i would never.

rawrcookies08 • 3 December 2011 at 10:04 PM

@whispers that wouldn't be able to happen (I don't think) but ok

Good luck on the song!! 😊

whispers • 3 December 2011 at 10:09 PM

@rawrcookies08
thanksz anyway ^^

balletninja • 3 December 2011 at 10:20 PM

2, just like every other love song... Sorry ☹️ Good start though!

whispers • 3 December 2011 at 10:27 PM

@balletninja
Thanx..now i make songs of personal experiences.... not lovey dovey songs

haunted • 3 December 2011 at 11:28 PM

4!

whispers • 4 December 2011 at 8:41 PM

@haunted
Thank yous 😸