My Awesome (I think) Song, PLEASE Rate!

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 2:10 PM

Here is my awesome (I think) song!

We just keep running through.
Through the night.
We ain't stopping for nobody,
Not even you.
Cause we've got things to do.

*instrumental 3 second break*

This, this, this,
This is our time, our time.
This, this, this,
This is our time, our time.
This, this, this,
This is our tiiiiime.
Don't you keep on bugging;
We just walk right past.
We don't have stuff to say,
Cause we gotta leave fast.

*instrumental 3 second break*

We got everything we need.
Clothes, drinks, food, and all.
But we won't pick up our phones,
So forget all calls.
We got a mission to complete.
Our reward is sweet!
But just don't forget (No, no, no);
Just don't forget;

*instrumental 3 second break*

This, this, this,
This is our time, our time.
This, this, this,
This is our time, our time.
This, this, this,
This is our tiiiiime.
Don't you keep on bugging;
We just walk right past.
We don't have stuff to say,
Cause we gotta leave fast.

That's all I have so far. I think it's done, but I have 3 questions for Egg Cavers.

1. What's a good name for it?
2. Does it need more verses/content?
3. Do you rate it great (5), good (4), okay (3), not so good (2) or really bad (1)? I f you really hate it, put 0. ☹️

Thank you! Ping some people you know if you think it is good or great! Bumps are greatly appreciated!

qwaszx • 23 August 2011 at 2:12 PM

Time to go, No, 4.

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 2:15 PM

Thanks @qwaszx

Just 2 things...

1. Is 'Time to go, No' your title suggestion?
2. Why were your dreams crushed? ☹️

piucca • 23 August 2011 at 2:27 PM

wrong forum. This is to suggest new ideas and items for the site, not to place creative writings.

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 2:32 PM

Oh, I'll switch it. Thanks @piucca !

piucca • 23 August 2011 at 2:39 PM

Your welcome 😊
Easy mistake though.
Looking fr suggestions for your song and put it in here hehe.

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 2:40 PM

Oh...heeheehee

whispers • 23 August 2011 at 2:52 PM

@roversydneygirl
1. It's our time
2. I think in the chorus, you have too many of the word 'this'
3. 4.5 ^^

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 2:53 PM

Thanks @whispers !

adopters • 23 August 2011 at 3:04 PM

its good

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 3:06 PM

Okay, thanks @adopters !

adopters • 23 August 2011 at 3:07 PM

its kk

lisa1321 • 23 August 2011 at 3:44 PM

I say 4 Its good

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 3:48 PM

Thanks people!

@Ian
@the_cattery
@peppermintcowboy
@crooton1

tdat • 23 August 2011 at 3:58 PM

4

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 4:01 PM

Oh, wow, thanks!

Deleted • 23 August 2011 at 4:14 PM

1.This Is Our Time
2.I think so far, you should have 1 more verse, then end the song....however you want
3. 4.5 😊

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 4:28 PM

Okay, thanks so much @akarikitty !

So far, the name is probably gonna be 'This Is Our Time' or 'Just Forget' or 'Just Remember' I can't decide!

Deleted • 23 August 2011 at 4:31 PM

@roversydneygirl

I really like the song layout 😊
What genre is it? That'd really help me while reading the song. 😊

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 4:33 PM

Kinda hip-hip/country mix, @akarikitty .

kdj • 23 August 2011 at 4:56 PM

Bump😸
Idk, whats da beat?

Deleted • 23 August 2011 at 5:04 PM

@roversydneygirl

Oh, crossover...that's cool! Really nice song all in all anways 😊

roversydneygirl • 23 August 2011 at 5:18 PM

I really don't know how to say the beat...kinda slow but also pumped.

Ian • 24 August 2011 at 10:33 AM

Topic moved. 😊

roversydneygirl • 24 August 2011 at 10:34 AM

Yup! @Ian I just kept it here cause more people post on this one.

lunarstarz • 25 August 2011 at 7:32 AM

4. I really like your songs 😃 But as I said before, I don't know the sound 😸 Though the lyrics sound sweet.

'This is our Time' would sound like a nice title, but it's basically the main part of the chorus.

I'm a terrible songwriter... well I never wrote one anyways 😋 but many songs have the main part of their chorus as their title, and for some reason it sometimes... bugs me? I don't know, maybe the creativity is lacking for the title, or the title just makes the song sound repetitive? I've got no clue myself why it bothers me sometimes

So I can't really recommend a title. For the content, as I said, I never wrote a song. But at the end, it's usually the chorus repeated, or chorus with a small twist at the end, or sometimes another verse with a specific part of the chorus in it.

Just some advice 😸 You're a good songwriter 😃

P.S. Are there echoes in the song? For example, you may sing 'This is our time' and echo is 'our time' or something

chocovampire • 25 August 2011 at 7:40 AM

It's really awesome!

roversydneygirl • 25 August 2011 at 8:07 AM

Thanks people!

@chocovampire
@lunarstarz

I'm waiting for that perfect title. I have a prize for anyone who does. 😉

Deleted • 25 August 2011 at 12:10 PM

hi friend i give it a four you say this is our time a litle to much

qwaszx • 25 August 2011 at 12:12 PM

@roversydneygirl It's time to go. Is the title I thought of