Wanna read?

hay7199 • 7 February 2012 at 7:57 PM

LOVE IT (Ba ba ba ba ba im lovin it!) XD

chapus • 7 February 2012 at 8:02 PM

@hay7199


Haha. Thanks! (LOL,McDonalds commercial/proverb.) XD

MORE PINGING! (I'm sooo evil...Hehehe...)

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james-bond • 8 February 2012 at 12:13 AM

I love your creative writing! 😃 I love how you wrote 'the snowflakes fall like feathers'. You could improve it even more by saying 'the snowflakes DRIFT like feathers' though, just a suggestion. 😸

And I also love 'the title was written in silver letters who would shine in the light of the warm fire'. You could fix it up a bit to 'the title was written in silver letters THAT would shine in the light of the warm fire'.

And after the sentance above, instead of putting another comma you could put a full stop and write 'It Said' and so on.
Up to you though. 😸

Great work!

puhie • 8 February 2012 at 11:26 AM

I like it!

primrose81 • 8 February 2012 at 2:18 PM

Cool😊 im writing a book also called "Aggregation". well technically i'm writing 4 books but that's my main one!!

chapus • 10 February 2012 at 11:08 PM

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More pinging...

cynt5100 • 10 February 2012 at 11:09 PM

Don't ping me. I don't like pings that aren't on rp's or topics for helping people

chapus • 10 February 2012 at 11:14 PM

@cynt5100

Oops, my bad. Didn't know that. =.=

duchess • 10 February 2012 at 11:26 PM

@chapus2009, That's a wonderful prologue! It's written so well, and your story seems really exciting 😃

chapus • 10 February 2012 at 11:29 PM

@duchess

Why thank you! 😃 Thats very kind of you.

passion • 11 February 2012 at 3:47 AM

@chapus2009 I enjoyed reading it, nicely written. ;]

chapus • 11 February 2012 at 11:45 AM

@passion

Why thanks. 😃

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deu • 11 February 2012 at 11:49 AM

@chapus2009 Je vais commencer lire l'histoire 😸

bunnyshadow • 11 February 2012 at 11:54 AM

I like it😊

chapus • 11 February 2012 at 4:41 PM

@deu

Tu peux parler en francais? C'est hot ca. Excuse moi, car je n'ai pas d'accents sur mon clavier. Peux tu aussi parler en anglais? Can you speak in english?

@bunnyshadow

Haha. Thanks, what is your favorite part so far?

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deu • 11 February 2012 at 4:55 PM

@chapus2009 Yes, I'm from Belgium and Belgians speak at least 4 languages 😸

chapus • 11 February 2012 at 4:56 PM

@deu

Wow. Impresive. O.o

Help me ping?

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evolutary • 11 February 2012 at 9:27 PM

@chapus2009 Ooh, I like it! By the way, you made a few errors.

"Very well, let us begin" There needs to be a comma or a full stop before the quotation marks, after begin. If there is a full stop, the 'h' in 'he' should be capitalised.

Also, when somebody finishes their sentence and after it is written 'he said' or etc, it is a comma, not a full stop. E.g:

"You took a good guess." he answered.
The full stop after guess should be a comma, and applies to other sentences as well.

But don't worry, they're just minor errors. 😊

chapus • 12 February 2012 at 11:06 AM

@evolutary

Thanks, I will go fix them. 😋

I AM WRITING PAGE 4.

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rawrcookies08 • 20 February 2012 at 5:31 PM

@chapus2009 Sounds like something I would read! 😃 Awesome!!

chapus • 20 February 2012 at 8:00 PM

@rawrcookies08

Thank you! 😃

hedwig68 • 25 November 2012 at 5:58 PM

@chapus2009

Yo. ^^

chapus • 25 November 2012 at 6:03 PM

@hedwig68 Thank you. *-* *hugs*

Livepulse pings, sorry to disturb you! ^^"

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hedwig68 • 25 November 2012 at 6:04 PM

@chapus2009 You're welcome! ^^

chapus • 25 November 2012 at 8:16 PM

Livepulse pings, sorry to disturb you! ^^"

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mairbear • 25 November 2012 at 8:37 PM

@chapus2009

Okay I only read the prologue so far but I like it already ❤️ I'm a sucker for good sentence structures LOL

I shall read more laters~ *has loads of homework* *dies*

Oh and side note.. T'es francais? 😱

chapus • 25 November 2012 at 9:57 PM

@mairbear Haha, glad you liked it. 😉 I'll be posting more and more pages daily. 😸

Et oui, je viens du Canada, alors je peux parler en francais. xD

Livepulse pings, sorry to disturb you! ^^"

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blueclaw • 25 November 2012 at 10:01 PM

@chapus2009

I SUPPORT THIS BOOK. XD

chapus • 25 November 2012 at 10:19 PM

@blueclaw Thanks. xD Which page are you at? owo

Livepulse pings, sorry to disturb you! ^^"

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airstar • 25 November 2012 at 10:27 PM

@chapus2009- Hey I don't know you, and this is crazy, but you pinged me, so I'm lurking maybe.