So You Think You Can WRITE?

lily- • 7 September 2011 at 5:14 PM

@smilies
I'm done writing.


They were all totally freaked out and more terrified then they had ever been in their entire lives. They started to walk to a tree they thought looked familiar, but they weren?t getting anywhere. They were panicking and they started to run, but they were getting nowhere. They even changed direction, went backwards, both left and right. They tried everything, but still they found no way out. What were they to do? Where were they supposed to go? They had to do something. They had to get out!

Finally Max got the idea of splitting up and going in different directions to see if they found anything. If any of them found anything or were in any trouble they were supposed to shout for the others to come for them and if none of them found anything they were to meet up in front of the hut they were at now. No-one but Danielle noticed something extremely familiar about that hut, but she just couldn?t figure out what, as well as that Danielle was the only one in the group who didn?t like the idea of splitting up, though no-one was listening to her. Danielle was fed up of acting all brave when she wasn?t, she didn?t want to split up and go alone. She no longer cared as they all called her a coward after she told them she would not budge from where they were, unless someone was with her. But no-on wanted to stay there and so each person chose their direction and went, leaving Danielle all alone.


someone please bump

clary • 7 September 2011 at 5:15 PM

bump

lily- • 7 September 2011 at 5:17 PM

Worried sick and alone, Danielle thought about home and checked her watch for the time as it had felt like ages since they had woken up however she could see no sunlight, but when she checked her watch it was stuck at the same time they had entered the ghost town. The hand was ticking but it was going nowhere. She then also realized what was so familiar about that hut, it was the same hut they had slept in and the same hut they had passed more than a hundred times while they were looking for a way out. That?s why they had not found a way out. That?s why they weren?t finding the path in the forest that led home. They were travelling in circles unknowingly all this time. But if that was the case, it had been ages that everyone had left her, so why hadn?t they passed her? They were supposed to do so by now weren?t they? Had they found a way out?

But as soon as Danielle asked that last question to herself she heard four shouts of help, which definitely belonged to her friends and then silence. Danielle finally got up and ran. She ran to each of the places where she thought she had heard her friends shout, but she found nothing in each direction she ran to. Nothing but the same hut that she had left from, where all this creepiness had started. She shouted for her friends and looked everywhere, but still she found nothing and ended up at the same place.

clary • 7 September 2011 at 5:17 PM

bump

lily- • 7 September 2011 at 5:19 PM

After trying so hard to find her friends she finally gave up and this time when she reached that hut she found a message written in the sand. It was written in a different language that was unknown to Danielle, but she could not stop staring at it. As she stared harder at it she started to understand and read what was written:-

"You are trapped. Many have come, but none have left and just as them you shall not either. Many have tried but suffered a fate worse then any other, for their souls cannot leave. You may try, but you shall also suffer the same fate. For NO-ONE can leave this dimension."




If you are one of those people who regret reading this story then may I remind you that I had warned you earlier, but you did not take my advice.




@smilies
So what do you think?

zhachai • 7 September 2011 at 6:35 PM

@lily-
good story, like it 😊

@smilies
lily- has done a good job, no?
sorry my story was pretty dodgy.... hmmmm...

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 12:07 AM

I'm not letting anything on 😊

ENTRIES ARE CLOSED. I will put some thought into the top.... Uhm.... Mystery number 😃

evolutary • 8 September 2011 at 12:12 AM

@smilies Happy birthday! 😃

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 12:13 AM

@evolutary Thanks 😊

evolutary • 8 September 2011 at 12:18 AM

@smilies Sorry that I don't have a present for you but let me try making a cake. xD (I'm really bad at this stuff but anyway)
----0---
---|\|---
-~-~-~-
|HAPPY |
|~==~ |
|B-DAY |

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 12:19 AM

@evolutary D'aw 😊 😊 😊 Thankies ❤️

evolutary • 8 September 2011 at 12:20 AM

@smilies I fixed it. Now it should work! Your welcome!😃

pipkitten • 8 September 2011 at 12:20 AM

@Smilies: Happy birthday~ 😊

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 12:24 AM

@evolutary
@pipkitten
😊 Judging may take some time, Imma reread them all several times 😸

zhachai • 8 September 2011 at 3:47 AM

@smilies
HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!! AGAIN!!!! 😊

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 6:57 AM

@smilies HAPPY BIRFDAY! Meh go find you a present. A BUNNEI!

lily- • 8 September 2011 at 12:53 PM

@zhachai
Thanks, I also like your story. It's really good.

Oh and a very happy birthday to you @smilies. Wish you have enjoyed all these years and wish you enjoy the rest of your life with each day getting better and better😃� 😉

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 3:34 PM

@smilies HaPpY bIrThDaY!!!!!!!!!!!!!😃😃😃😃😃😃😃

pizza5pizza5 • 8 September 2011 at 3:39 PM

Happy birthday 😃

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 4:01 PM

@smilies Okay lemme try this.



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| | ]
|Happy!!!!!!! | ]
|Birhtday!!!! | ]
|Smilies!!!!!!! | ]
|AKA!!!!!!!!!!!!| ]
|BUNNY!!!!!!!!| ]
|QUEEN!!!!!!!!| ]

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 5:44 PM

Contestants and their Entries
@Lizardfeather with a Mo In Flight
@Evolutary with The Grim Reaper
@Bluegirl80 with The Look of Hope
@Eternaleyes with The Sickle of Death
@Nkiay with Death
@Redstar-Fireclan with The Hunted Forest
@Randomkitty17 with The Last Cat
@redfire77 a Crazy Scientific Geek GMO Speech
@pipkitten with Nameless
@ayuzawa with an Arachnid thing
@icicle_9510 with Faded_Echoe's Memory
@pegasasu with a Very Gory Story
@zhachai with The Kramoch
@Lily- with Spookeh

14 AMAZING ENTRIES, EACH MORE STUNNING THAN THE LAST! (Not saying the first was the worst though X))
BUT ONLY /7/ CAN MOVE ON!!!

Someone post so I can say who will move on!

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 5:45 PM

@smilies .... //Nervous.//

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 5:48 PM

@bluegirl You should be... My IPod's spell check changed your name to Bluefish.....

CONGRATULATIONS TO: (no order)
@nkiay (A lot like many other entries, but I liked the inventive start)
@lily- (Very imaginative and I love spooky!)
@randomkitty17 (ROTFL the one entry that made me not only smile, but laugh too!)
@pegasasu (Remember, there are children on this site too, as much as I loved your entry...)
@bluegirl80 (I definitely liked the second one better... More my style)
@icicle_9510 (It was cute, I would love to hear more...)
@ayuzawa (Again, rather like other entries, but it had a lot more behind it, about how the monster FELT and why.)
YOU HAVE MADE IT TO THE NEXT ROUND!

I'm VERY sorry to have to say goodbye to anyone, many like @evolutary were so close it was PAINFUL. Others like @Redfire77 amazed me with their smarts, and I know you are all fab writers, but there can only be 7 and some were just not what I was looking for or too similar, not original enough... Sorry.

GOSH YOU GUYS ARE MORBID X)

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 5:50 PM

@smilies XD I hate it when it does that. Its changed Chloekins name to Choke Hold. XD And thank you!! //HUGGLES// Sorry to those who didnt make it. D=

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 5:51 PM

@bluegirl80 It changed Trish to TRASH, ROTFL ROTFL ROTFL X)

@icicle_9510
@ayuzawa

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 5:52 PM

@smilies ROFL ROFL! XD Can the next one be a poem? Or something about Life stories? Like memories?

randomkitty17 • 8 September 2011 at 5:53 PM

@smilies yay, thanks! I'm surprised, I was really tired when I wrote that, was worried I would lose! But, thank you! 😃

But good job even to those who didn't win! 😊

smilies • 8 September 2011 at 5:53 PM

@bluegirl80 Nope 😉 I really should have said somewhere that I like Creative Writing >_< >_< >_<

Deleted • 8 September 2011 at 5:56 PM

@smilies Okay. I would have done one about the time I was in the snake exibit and then the most DEADLY snake in there got out and tried to bite me. And it still had vemon. 0.0

lily- • 8 September 2011 at 5:56 PM

@smilies
Wow! I actually made it?
*Is so shocked she is staring at the computer with her mouth open*

Oh and happy birthday again😊. Also sorry to all those who didn't make it *also huggles*and congratulations to all those who did😊